“The Receptionist” Rewrites

Just thinking ahead, but here’s the place to post rewrites for The Receptionist. Here’s hoping all of you won’t get confused! Be sure to post your first draft of Receptionist reviews on the original Receptionist post!

2 Comments on ““The Receptionist” Rewrites

  1. Once in a blue moon one stumbles upon that rare show that manages to both entertain and enlighten, inspire laughter and self-reflection, and to show just what can be done when genre conventions are hurled out the window. The Receptionist, performed by the Flanagan Campus Community College of Rhode Island at KCACTF on January 31st and February 1st 2013 is exactly that kind of show. It draws you in, clamps on tight and refuses to let go long after the actors have taken their final bows.
    The story looks at the happenings in a certain office building where there is more going on than meets the eye. The play starts out with a comedic tone that helps the audience grow close to the characters and then takes a sharp turn strait into drama-ville about halfway through. This radical shift in tone is aided by many wonderful touches, such as the ambient music (consistently featuring many classic rock songs, including “Hotel Californa”) that cuts out all off suddenly during a blackout. Erin Archer absolutely deserves heaps of praise for her turn as the titular receptionist. Her magnificent expressions help you know exactly what is on her mind at any given moment and ultimately allow one to piece together a complete picture of the show. The one issue comes from working with a thrust stage, the audience may be cut off from some of the action if they have the misfortune of being seated on one of the sides. That is only a minor nitpick, though, and in no way stops the play from being a wonderful and thought provoking piece. Missing it could be considered torture.

  2. So, as it stated in other places, this is really the place to post rewrites, not initial reviews, so as to avoid confusion. That said, let me respond here:
    Overall, this is good work! It could actually be a little tighter throughout. By this I mean that I imagine that a verbal reading of this piece might sound as if you sort of ramble around to your point in places where one could grab attention more quickly. (example: “The audience may be cut off from some of the action if they have the misfortune of being seated on one of the sides.”) This sort of thing happens throughout, and I think there are spots where one could sacrifice artistry for getting straight (or at least straighter) to the point. Speaking of “straight,” it’s the one misspelled word.
    One last thought: The last sentence does that thing again where you sort of slyly reference the play in such a way that a person who saw it might enjoy, but one who has not might find confusing.

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